Posted on Saturday, January 14th, 2017
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Here is some feedback about your pitch:
2. Great problem to solve. Is there a personal story you could tell? It doesn't have to be YOUR story, but a story always makes the pitch more personal and helps us feel the pain. The stat that one veteran commits suicide every 20 minutes is compelling and sound like a lot - tell us how many veterans there are or a total annual number to bring it home.
3. I also like your solution - a training center for Brazilian jujitsu, yoga and weight training - but you need to talk more about how this environment both helps build mutually supportive relationships (it is, after all, possible to engage in these activities and NOT grow closer to someone else) and teach how to get off medication (though this seems to contradict your opening statement that the proper medications are necessary for healing). The activities sound like something that would attract military men to your facility. Now, tell us about your programming that will use these tools to break down barriers, build relationships and shape behaviors.
4. Will the vets pay for their own memberships, or is this something that might be covered under veterans' benefits? How much (in your imagination) will this membership cost per person? Why would they (or the VA) choose your service over other options? This is your CVP.
5. I like the connection to the Wounded Warriors Project - but what exactly is the connection? Free or special programming for physically wounded vets? Might you offer some of your programs in VA hospitals?
6. Good ask!
7. Good confidence and eye contact!